The love triangle in my YA novel, This Side of Tomorrow, has had readers
picking sides ever since my critique partners looked at the first draft of my
manuscript. Some like Parker Redding, the adorable football player who is alive and available for the main
character, Rachel Hutton, to have a future with and others prefer Rob Thompson, the
spirit who is well, not alive, but
becomes Rachel’s best friend and forbidden love.
Here’s an excerpt from the book where Rachel
first speaks with Rob after he rescues her from the antagonist, Ethan Scott, another
spirit who just attacked her:
I
peeked out and saw his silhouette in the light streaming from my room. With
shaking hands, I pulled the door open.
The
faint outline of his body appeared, becoming more and more visible with each
passing moment. Adrenaline flooded my veins and I felt a little dizzy. Rob’s
dark blue eyes peered down at me from below long lashes. He shifted from one
foot to the other and stuffed his hands in his pockets. I could see him
perfectly.
“Are
you okay? Did he hurt you?”
I
stared at him in the soft lamplight. He was beyond hot—a work of art.
Beautiful.
“I’m
okay. Sort of. Come in.” I tried to clean up my face with a tissue as I closed
the door behind him.
“If
Ethan wasn’t already dead, I would’ve killed him tonight. He was bad enough
when he was alive, and he’s only gotten worse since not crossing over.” He
pinched the bridge of his nose and closed his eyes.
The
room started to tilt and I sat down on the bed. I took a few deep breaths and
felt better.
“Sure
you’re okay?” Rob’s brow furrowed.
I
nodded, hugging a pillow.
Kitty
jumped to the floor and rubbed her face against Rob’s legs, purring.
“Do
you two know each other? And what is crossing over?”
Rob
scratched Kitty’s head. “She introduced herself to me when you moved in. I
never had a pet, so I kind of like her.” Kitty blinked her eyes at him. If she
trusted him maybe I should, too. “And crossing over is what your spirit does
when it goes to heaven. Or hell. Ethan’s refusing to cross over.”
And now here’s an excerpt from the book where
Rachel first sees Parker shirtless at a pool party:
Parker spun the football in his hands as he approached. No matter how many times I’d imagined the sight in my mind, the
real thing was a million times better than what I’d come up with. Smooth, tan
skin covered his muscular torso and his dark eyes met mine with a hint of
shyness. My heart took off at a gallop and I silently cursed my blazing cheeks.
“Beer?” he asked.
“Yeah.” I gave him a timid smile.
Parker grabbed a bottle from a nearby cooler
and opened it before handing to me. I thanked him and took a drink, hoping it
would calm me down. He gestured toward the pool. “Stairs or diving board?”
“Diving board.” I sat my drink on a table and
removed the beach towel I’d wrapped around my waist.
His eyes scanned my body so quickly it might
have been considered discreet, but his face turned red, giving him away. He jogged
over to the board and jumped off, doing a flip before hitting the water. I laughed.
His blushing episode was beyond cute.
He popped up halfway across the pool. “Your
turn!”
So, based on the limited information I’ve shared, which
love interest would you probably choose? You’ll have to read the book to find
out which one Rachel ends up with, but if you’d like to comment on your favorite
pick, please share!
You can read my manuscript for free on Swoon Reads, then
please rate it and leave a comment. I only have until the end of January to get
more ratings for Macmillan to consider publishing it this spring! Here’s the
link: http://www.swoonreads.com/m/this-side-of-tomorrow
It might not be the wisest choice to choose the "dead" guy :), but I swooned big time over how Rob showed physical restraint and expressed his love toward Rachel, mostly through concern and protection....
ReplyDeleteSo my vote's for Team Rob!
Thanks for sharing, Jenny! I loved writing his character and quite a few readers were rooting for Rob. The forbidden fruit is the sweetest in some cases. :-)
DeleteWhen I first read This Side of Tomorrow, I worked really hard (and succeeded at) being neutral, because when I critiqued it I had to be able to understand the appeal of both relationships. Even now, I have a hard time choosing, but I was probably leaning toward Rob a little more because of the forbidden romance factor. I'm a sucker for a good forbidden love story.
ReplyDeleteTwo votes for Rob! It is hard to choose, but there's something about the forbidden love that pulls us in. Thanks for sharing, Carrie! :-)
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